I made this raw edit as I wanted a rough idea to how the dialogue would sound without all the non-diegetic elements such as Vox Pops and interviews and an instrumental. It is important to do a first draft as it shows my starting progress and from the first draft to the next you should be able to see clear development and improvement. 

My first thoughts: 

Positives: 

• My script was useful as it had exactly what I had to say written. 
• The audio sounds crisp as I recorded my audio in a radio studio 
• Had the opportunity to record as many times as I wanted as I can cut and edit and re-record 

Negatives: 

• Made a few mistakes  
• The levels kept peaking when saying certain words 
• It is a bit too wordy. 

Feedback from JJ (mentor): 

·         Variety of voices – you should make it clear in your pre-production what are the different voices – e.g. The Vox clips, clips from YouTube. etc 

·         Think about how music is used to keep the momentum and the different scenes – have a listen to something like BBC Radio Newsbeat to see how they produce their audio and use music to help engage audiences. 

·         I personally think it might be too wordy – so think about that? 

·         This could be a series of a few podcasts? 

Analysis of feedback: 

• On my script I have the links and the certain links and interviews I will use for my production. 
• I listened to BBC Radio Newsbeats and then usually use up beat instrumental beds even when the topic is serious or sensitive. However, to have my own spin on it I feel that by using a dark, slow bed will truly emphasise what is being said. 
• In order to stop my piece from being too wordy I have shortened my script and I have only included the vital elements to my piece. 

• My initial script was edited in order to form this script, (my second draft), so the piece of media I am creating would be the final episode to this podcast series of the untold truth of the MeToo Movement. 

Changes that will be made: 

• Add a numerous amount of audio interviews and clips extracted from YouTube. 
• Include multiple Vox Pops from both men and women. 
• Include a bed that complements the vocal audio.